[CHAPTER 5 ONGOING] Rockman DASH Legends

[HF]

@ Dashe: I had to do a double-take on the spelling for "Traveller", and found out that I have been using a mix of British and American spelling for some time (again); a small habit of mine which also applies to accents to help distinguish context (e.g. Router (rau-ter) is used exclusively for the computer hardware, or closer to this series' context, Data (day-ta) is used for the Monkey rather than actual information as-is).

Also, I would do a double-check on the "Go it alone" bit and maybe reword things a little, the same goes with a revision of pages 1 and 2. A quick glace at it and the introduction felt insufficient to describe the world's setting as a standalone.

@ MegaTuga: It turned out to be one, to make up for the lost week.

@ Rockman Striker: In a way, yes. Though it's not exactly that either (I think I did a description of my interpretation in an earlier post).

[HF]

Unfortunately, this week (understandably) ended without an update.

But just to make this one not an empty week with nothing gained, let me share a bit of trivia with everyone:

The fight scene in pages 31 to 33 (inclusive) were originally a much shorter two-thirds of a full page which looked like this in the first draft. When I got to this page, I did not like how short it felt the 'struggle' felt, so I decided to go with a lengthened-out battle as was already seen.

As for the coming week, the next page is on its way, so hopefully next week will have something.

[Deleted]

Thank you for sharing how the first draft looked like compared to the final product.

Looking forward to the coming week's content.

[HF]

Update: More (not-so) guessing games!




With a few obvious changes to the world setting, I feel that I should have some of it explained out after this arc is over (if it's worth continuing). Besides, I like the idea of showing my working and integrate it with the actual storyline.

[Dashe]

Circle and shoot, Rock! That does it every time!

I think the fact that it's a fancomic in the first place, as well as what you've got already, explains the changes well enough. Too much supplementary exposition would slow you down even further, should you decide to continue.

If you still really want to show your work, what you're doing now is actually ideal. That's just releasing all of the changes as supplementary material outside the main comic. Audiences are very good at suspending their disbelief, so spoon-feeding us the content changes through the plot itself shouldn't be necessary to progress. The way you tell the story now is more than good enough to explain itself on its own. I'd honestly just keep telling it if I were you, because the changes make sense and tell a coherent, entertaining story.

[MegaTuga]

SHOOT THE GENERATOR TRIGS! SHOOT THE GENERATOR!

Or the place where the ripped arm was before.. that would make more sense than shooting at it from anywhere.

[Deleted]

Really like the latest page. Looks like MegaMan finally figured out how to beat the Hanmuru Doll.

I don't really think you would need to explain the changes, as it is a fan-comic, but it is up to you.

[Loken]

No man do your thing, we are really enjoying your style and the changes.

[HF]

Note: I might annotate this post a little later with replies and personal comments (or just make a new post with them), just want to...

Update: Made it in (MMLS) time? Looks like I did, though later than I have hoped. Damn.



Edit: Grammatical error fixed. Thanks again, Dashe!

[Mikéy]

Annotate? Replies? Personal comments? Hmm.

The new page looks as good as the rest. I must say, I'm thinking the anticipation of him finally making it outside is starting to really kick in. This is the longest I've seen an intro ruin draw out, and I keep telling myself it's art, not a video game, yet I still can't help but be the tiniest bit impatient. "What's next? What's next?"

Which means you're doing a good job, HF.

[Dashe]

"I've got one chance at this!"

Other than that...keep at it! You're sooooo close to the arc's resolution!

[HF]

The main reason why I consider a reasonable amount of exposition necessary in-story is for the sake of completion; even if this comic may not continue or end anytime soon, I do not want to make a comic simply as a medium that appeals to those familiar to the series, but also to those who just want to enjoy a comic as-is without having to go through its source material. Simply put, I aim to make something that can stand on its own without using the original games as a critical crutch to enjoy it.

As Dashe and a few others have pointed out already, I will be wary of what content to make discussion of and what is best left for supplementary content. All that's left is to let me go about this with a little planning (I have already thought of a few ways to do this, but I would appreciate it if I'm informed of overdoing it). Of course, if anyone wants to throw in a request about the in-story stuff, I am willing to answer them (and even start a FAQ or something to make a quick reference, should it be needed).


@ Dashe: Indeed, the 'tutorial arc' is coming to its conclusion. Thanks again for proof-reading.

@ Mikey: It's certainly long isn't it? Looking back, I inevitably feel a little weird with how I approached it in the first few pages where Rock is shown; I was trying to follow how he looks in the games, which gradually changed along the way.

[Dashe]

Well, I've got it printed out here in full, so if you'd like I could actually run a live test on a pretty hefty group of people who've never heard of Legends. It could serve as a really nice gauge for the amount of exposition actually needed to keep non-fans on the same page as the rest of us.

[Rockman Striker]

I wonder how much money Dashe spends on ink for her printer...
Anyway, it's a good idea, showing your work to people who've never played Legends, and then ask them if the story feels complex or understandable, then if necessary, you could say them later that is based on a videogame.
This way you'll know which details need to be explained in order to make this comic stand for it's own.

[Deleted]

Uh oh MegaMan, Roll's not going to be happy at all.

I love the latest page, like the Hanmuru Doll's glowing eye and MegaMan lunging towards the reaverbot to attack.