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Post by Rockman Striker on Nov 8, 2016 13:03:39 GMT -5
I really like the way you're managing the story although I think you could try to include more panels in a single page whenever you need the story to move on a faster pace.
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Post by HF on Nov 9, 2016 8:26:50 GMT -5
although I think you could try to include more panels in a single page whenever you need the story to move on a faster pace. Just for that, everyone will forced to see a new page next week. I hope you're proud of yourself.
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Post by Dashe on Nov 9, 2016 12:09:07 GMT -5
Ironically, more panels to a page causes the story to move at a SLOWER pace once it's all said and done and printed out. Seriously, print RMDL and read it like a bound book. We're playing the long game, Striker, and we can't have a good story without a variety of rhythm in the story's pacing. But good news for you, the City Hall battle's over--or at least it looks that way--and that means we get more talk and less action for now. Meaning more panels per page on average and less "Look at it for three seconds and you've seen everything."
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Post by HF on Nov 15, 2016 8:27:48 GMT -5
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Post by HF on Nov 29, 2016 6:38:44 GMT -5
Update: New Page (plus one more silent update from last week) is up now! Additionally, you can now leave comments on individual pages! Give it a go and let me know what you guys think!
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Post by Rockman Striker on Nov 29, 2016 22:22:51 GMT -5
See? That's what I was talking about, that last page depicts the collateral damage of the fight way more better than in the games (mostly because it's supposed to be an E rated game) kudos for that. I guess I'm not really accustomed to reading web comics, I prefer to have the full chapter available before I forget what happened last page. But I agree that this changes on the pase make the story more interesting and easy to assimilate.
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Post by HF on Dec 4, 2016 23:56:30 GMT -5
See? That's what I was talking about, that last page depicts the collateral damage of the fight way more better than in the games (mostly because it's supposed to be an E rated game) kudos for that. There's this little bit of 'realism' I always want to inject into the story, and some of it inspired by discussions. When working on this and the last page, I went though some war drama stories to get a feel of how to portray it. Specifically, I want to show the aftermath of a hostile invasion attempt, but at the same time showing how a city would react beyond total panic: Officers and medical teams would help the injured, distribution of (limited) supplies, checking for remaining hazards such as dud explosives and vehicles, and so on. The city and its people may have suffered some losses, but they're recovering and rebuilding quickly. Yeah, I get you. Compared to waiting huge amounts of time between chapters (can't help it due to real-life) and getting them bit by bit while receiving criticism though, I prefer to keep some form of communication and progress going.
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Post by HF on Dec 6, 2016 7:46:37 GMT -5
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Post by MegaTuga on Dec 6, 2016 9:09:47 GMT -5
I've read/seen enough manga/anime to know the meaning behind Roll's creepy smile...
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Post by HF on Dec 13, 2016 8:42:28 GMT -5
I've read/seen enough manga/anime to know the meaning behind Roll's creepy smile... Everybody dies and Juno awakens to, well, nothing. BAD END Update: Do you want a new page? How about you? And you? What about you? You too? ... you know what, let's just pretend all of you said 'yes' to that, alright?
Mentioned it elsewhere, but I would like to again confirm that there will be a new RMDL page weekly for the rest of December! Followed by a small hiatus just so I can recover from various real-life stuff and get more buffer. Second half's planned to be detail-heavy so I want to do a bit more preparation on it. Thanks for understanding!
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Post by Dashe on Dec 14, 2016 12:51:10 GMT -5
Yessss! I like the direction you're taking with Roll here. Much better than the games, where she's just, "Okay, now that you beat the boss and saved City Hall, I can drive you around this island so you can keep doing the mayor's dirty work!"
And take all the break you need, you've certainly earned it.
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Post by HF on Dec 20, 2016 8:43:46 GMT -5
Yessss! I like the direction you're taking with Roll here. Much better than the games, where she's just, "Okay, now that you beat the boss and saved City Hall, I can drive you around this island so you can keep doing the mayor's dirty work!" Because it begins and ends with money, or her abandonment issues; whichever comes first. Update: New page up! Now a deal is being made! Or...
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Post by MegaTuga on Dec 20, 2016 11:45:28 GMT -5
I never knew that Amelia could be this cunning. At least this time she didn't just wiggle her butt which made Rock just say: "yes Ma'am!"
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Post by Dashe on Dec 22, 2016 23:02:24 GMT -5
"Accommodation" doesn't have enough M's in it. The bottom right panel with Amelia also reads a little weird this time. I'd have written something like, "And you're free to keep whatever you find there, including any parts you need to repair your ship!"
That's been the first grammar sweep in a good while, though.
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Post by HF on Dec 25, 2016 9:03:59 GMT -5
"Accommodation" doesn't have enough M's in it. The bottom right panel with Amelia also reads a little weird this time. I'd have written something like, "And you're free to keep whatever you find there, including any parts you need to repair your ship!" That's been the first grammar sweep in a good while, though. Thanks for the heads up (and sorry for the late response)! It should be fixed now.
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