Phil & Roy's Big Break.

[Loken]

Phil & Roy's big break.

Phillip: Yo, Ron, you there man?
Roy: *Mumble, mumble.*
Phillip: Roy if you don't answer me I'm going to crawl back outta' here.
Roy: Yeah, Phil I'm here, I just answered the door for the takeout guy.
Phillip: You better stay focused, or you're gonna' get me killed.
Roy: Dude you're a pro, you got this!
Phillip: Are you sure this tunnel even goes to a ruin?
Roy: Yeah, this kid said it was legit.
Phillip: You're joking right?
Roy: Well, his dad said it was too.
Phillip: Oh geez dude shut up, I see a light ahead.
Roy: Oh yeah, that's the ruin!
Phillip: I know...oh man it's darker than I thought it would be down here. *turns on helmet light*
Roy: You want to go left, but watch out, there's two revers around the corner.
Phillip: *He peeks around corner* It's just two fat one's.
Roy: alright, take care of em' Philly-boy.
Phillip: *He jumps around corner, and shoots 6 six shots with his buster, taking the zakobon out.* Alright, some zenny!
Roy: How much?
Phillip: Not alot, maybe we'll get enough this time to get me some decent armor or buster parts.
Roy: No, if I can't buy new radio equipment, you can't get armor. Like you said, we got debt to pay. Take a left.
Phillip: *He turns left* yeah, you're right, BUT THERE'S A CHEST IN THE CORNER!
Roy: Be careful it could be a trap one.
Phillip: *He opens the chest* I don't know what it is. Some busted up metal.
Roy: Hey, we can't just sell heaps of metal, leave it. Turn left, three small revers.
Phillip: *He turns the corner to see three floating reverbots in his face* WHAAA! *He falls backwards shooting.*
Roy: PHIL YOU ALRIGHT!? PHIL!
Phillip: Woo. *he whips sweat from his brow* It was three floating exploding ones!
Roy: You're good?
Phillip: Yeah I'm good. *breathing heavily* Hey, Roy there's a-
Roy: Phil! Do you see a door? There should be a door.
Phillip: YES, Roy I see the door. *He opens door. wwshank.* DUDE IT'S A REFRACTOR!
Roy: YES! I KNEW MY SHORT CUT WOULD WORK! HAHAHA!
Phillip: It's blue and shiny, and it's sure to be worth enough to pay off the car and my arm!
Roy: Finally, we made some profit, and just in time, those loan sharks have been calling all week!
Phillip:*He touches the refractor.* Oh god man, we can fit this back through the hole.
Roy: Oh well the long way is worth this! Hurry up and snag it!
Phillip:*He slowly picks up refractor.*
Roy: OH RUN, BIG BLIP, BIG BLIP! RUN!
Phillip: *He starts running back* Give me directions! *A hanmuru doll breaks through the wall*
Roy: Just stay to the right!
Phillip: *He takes 3 rights* THIS THINGS GONNA' CRUSH ME!
Roy: Go straight then left! There's gonna' be a reverbot, run past it!
Phillip:*He takes the left, still with the doll hot on his heels, he's almost falling with every step.*
*He sees a guruguru and leaps over it. The charging reverbot is crushed by the hanmuru doll.*
Ron: Take two rights, there are a bunch of little blips, probably the floating ones!
Phillip: *He takes the rights and fires his buster as fast as he can, shooting down nearly a dozen foo-roo's, with the raging giant in tow.*
Roy: Take a left and run through the door, he shouldn't be able to follow you!
Phillip: *He runs through the door and collapses on the ground, with the great thud of the hanmuru doll smashing into the door.*
Roy: Phil man! You there!? You made it, that's the elevator!
Phillip: Sweeet. *He coughs heavily and blacks out*

Roy: Wake up sleepy Phil!
Phillip: Huh.. wha?
Roy: You passed out in the ruin, I went down the elevator and carried you back to the car. You're in the hospital bro, you made it!
Phillip: *He rises out of the bed, forehead wrapped in bandages, hair matted with dirt, still in his digging jeans and jacket.* Let's go sell that refractor!*
Roy: Is he good to go Doc?
Doctor: Well he should be ok now, it's been about twelve hours, you might need to help him walk, but he should be fine to go to the market for a bit.
Roy: What do we owe you?
Doctor: I'll cover it boy's, just go sell that thing and come back and tell me how much it fetched!
Phillip: Yes sir! *He and Roy leave for the market.*

Phillip: Hello sir, how much is this worth? *he raises the refractor over the counter*
Junkman: Oh boy! Hand it here fellas', let me take a look! *gets out a magnifying glass, and inspects it.*
Roy: Hurry up man, is it worth a fortune!
Junkman: Nope it's fake!
Phillip and Roy: WHAT!
Roy: They're gonna' take away my car!
Phillip: Your car!? They're gonna' take my ARM!
Junkman: Hold on boy's, did it trigger a trap when ya' lifted it?
Phillip: YES, AND ALL FOR NOTHING!
Junkman: Oh no, no, my boy's. It might be a fake, but it works as a decoy! Any digger could use this to avoid those traps in the ruins!
Roy: Will you buy it!?
Junkman: Yea, I will.
Phillip: Please sir, we really need this! For how much!?
Junkman: For no less than ten thousand zenny!
Phillip: Thank you so much sir! *shaking his hand violently*
Roy: Looks like I get that radio now, and you get your armor Phil!

By Ryan "Loken" Carter

[Anima]

Though it's in script form, I must say this is actually pretty good!

The way you portray the characters is pretty good, and I can tell their personalities from the start.

Also an interesting concept with a decoy refractor.

I say, a 4/5. It's good, heck it's REALLY good, but a few spots that needs some wok. Also it could be a little bit longer too.

[Mikéy]

Heck, I really like it. This could turn into a really great story if you were to continue, what with the arm, car, and radio which we don't know anything about.

I'd almost say Roy would resemble me, but only partially.

I would have expected the foo-roo's to be Mi-tans, but that's just me.

Great script, I give yah a 4.5/5

[Loken]

Thanks alot guys!
I was going to make it longer but it was 4:30 and I had school
I might do some revising I'm not sure if I'll ever make another though.