Kaitou's fan fic (yes..the comics..written ver.)

[KaitouAilren]

First of all...you might ask me "But you have the comics already! Why are you writting it?" My answer will be...the scanner's not working..might take 2 weeks or so (but it already is out of comission for..a month.) So hmmm...this will not be a long one but ah dang don't worry its fine!!! Come on! It will be updated not like my dang comics in the fan artwork sec.! And of I've modified the story since the story in my comic-form seems a bit lacking on details.

the title's Rockman DASH: Believing in the future *BANG!* (Somebody-I-Don't-Know: HEY MAKE A GOOD TITLE YOU GODMODDING IDIOT MEDIC!!!! *then other words he said. !@%%$*#()!*)
Ahem...sorry for the interruption..let's start.
Chapter 1- Back on the groove.
*ahem* (gets her folder...and summarizes it)
A snowy day. Rock(man) bought 2 cans of coffee..then he stopped looking at the snow that falls from the sky.
*interruption: OMIGOD!!! GAMEFAQS' NOT WORKING!*
"Sigh...three years have passed. Times does fly quickly." Rock said to himself. And looked at the 2 cans..then glanced at his feet. "A lot has happened...I didn't even realized I've grown." He glanced up again and continued walking. In the bench was Roll, she was just looking at the sky and then saw Rock. "Waited long Roll?" Rock asked and threw the can. Roll reacts quickly and grabbed it. "Not really, Thanks!" The two opened their cans. Then seconds later Rock sneezed. "Achoo!" "Now what did I say?" Roll said looking pretty upset then she looked for a scarf in the bag (it was invisible in the drawing. Roll looks like...errr...idiotic and being a Roll fangirl I don't want her to look like one. PS: I look like an idiot sometimes ) "Here!" Roll gives Rock a scarf..then Rock immediately wore it around his neck. "Errr..thanks Roll but..." "But what...?" Roll wondered. "Its so big!" Rock said. *And in my drawing you saw Roll kinda' spit the coffee she's drinking.* "But...still its warm thanks Roll!" Rock said then smiled. "T-thanks for the compliment though I have to improve my skills." "Oh hey a-are you finished drinking? I'm going to throw my can now." Rock asked. "I'm going to throw mine don't wo--" Rock grabbed Roll's can before she gets up. "I'll throw these...'kay?" Then Rock went to the trash bin. "Its been 2 years since Roll's been my girlfriend at first all of them did not agreed but in the end...they agreed but it took long enough for gramps and the others to answer. Its quite simple I love and Roll..and she loves me too." Then Rock went back to the bench but he did not sit beside Roll but went behind her. "Its been two years huh, Roll?" Rock asked.. "Uhh...um...yeah." (As you can se-- I mean...read Roll's kinda' nervous...why? you ask? ASK HER NOT ME!! O.o;) Then Rock hugged Roll. Roll blushes completely asking herself.."W-what's Rock...d-doing?" "Roll?" Rock called Roll's attention. "Ehh...?? Uhhh...W-what is it." Roll glanced at the two girls saying "Awww..how sweet." Roll blushed red than before. "Roll...you ain't mad aren't you?" Rock asked. "Umm...No." Roll said in reply...ACK! My back hurts....I bet those who will reply are those who always reply in the fan artwork sec. I've expected that. Oh yeah I'm creating of the intro for this!! (I mean...3 years back from the current storyline of this.) Toodles..gotta sleep! I'm going to resume tomorrow morning!

[Dashe]

Condensing the whole thing into one big paragraph and constantly adding sidenotes into the text makes this very, very hard to read...

[Four]

Sorry Kaitou, but I've gotta agree with fab on this one ^_^. Maybe if you could add some spaces every now and then? (Actually I make five spaces at every start to make it look more like a paragraph, but it doesn't show in neither the forum or FF.net, so it's just useless information ^,^)

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A snowy day. Rock(man) bought 2 cans of coffee..then he stopped looking at the snow that falls from the sky.

"Sigh...three years have passed. Times does fly quickly." Rock said to himself. And looked at the 2 cans..then glanced at his feet. "A lot has happened...I didn't even realized I've grown."

He glanced up again and continued walking. In the bench was Roll, she was just looking at the sky and then saw Rock.

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This is your first time? It was pretty okay . Obviously a lot of errors, but hey, a nice try nonetheless.

[Musashi]

Yeah, you really, really, need to break it down, but otherwise, its really good! ^_^

[KaitouAilren]

Sigh....the big fat lazy girl comes back..(take a guess who's it.) Insert name here[/s]
Okay...It's been a while okay...I'm concentrating on the RMD:BITF Intro than the main one I'm making (see? she's really lazy) I'm having a hard time concentrating in the drawing since she's lazy and got another story to write
Okay...let's continue then..
"Oh yeah...hey...uhh...Roll?" Rockman suddenly noticed something. "You know I noticed we don't tak too much with each other on weekdays..." "Huh? What do you mean?" Roll asked but then Rock put his hands in his pockets and starts walking.."Let's go home...I'm dead tired. Let's talk about it later okay?" Roll stood up and followed Rock. "Okay...uh? Oh wait Rock!" And both of them head towards the west district of Reminal Island..where they chose to live.* Then a few minutes later..."Data! We're home!....huh?" Rock and Roll both entered the house and was surprised no monkey greeted them. "Now that's weird.." "Oh Rock! Data's here." Roll called Rock while hugging Data who seems to be asleep. Both of them lied*² on the mat and Rock held Roll's hand. "...Hmm..So what's up earlier Rock? We still talk on weekdays don't we?" "Well...we don't talk too much unlike on weekends..'cause we're busy about school and stuff." Rock said. "But...because of school we met our friends here." he added. "Yep." Roll replied while letting go of Data...'cause...he's twirling around very much. "You know Rock--" "You know Roll--" both of them said at the same time and they both laughed. "I...I was...*giggles* I was thinking of going to sleep now." Roll said while trying to stand up..Rock stood up quickly and lend Roll his hand. "I was also thinking the same thing. Need a hand?" Rock said and stretched his hand offering help. "Sure." Roll held his hand and stood up. They both went inside their rooms after a few minutes they went out again. "I'm finished." Rock said with a towel in his head. "Well okay I will go to bed now..good night Rock!" "good night too Roll." And then they went back inside their rooms. Roll sighs in her bed while Rock just sat on the floor reading some comics..but a few minutes later Rock got irritated and walked downstairs to get some coffee and Roll can't also sleep and went out to the balcony. -Knock Knock!- ....Nobody answered or maybe not. Roll's in the balcony so Rock probably won't hear her. "Maybe she's already asleep...is she that dead tired?" Rock whispered to himself and walked away and by that time Roll opened the door. "Huh? Rock?" Roll opened the door wide.."Oh Roll I thought you we're asleep..why didn't you answer?" "I was at the balcony...maybe you didn't hear me...So..can't sleep too?" "Yeah...I guess its a little early for bed time." Rock said and gave Roll a can of hot coffee. Both of them climbed to upper most part of their house...it was covered with snow since its just two weeks before christmas. "Its been a while already since we lived here.." "Yeah..I remembered that..our shuttle crashed in reminal forest.." Roll replied looking at the sky...it seems it will snow any minute. Both of them opened their cans..but Roll suddenly felt uncomfortable and Rock noticed it and he asked "Hm? What's wrong Roll?" "I....I was wondering i-if you could train me Rock."
chapter 1 part 2 end...
sigh..my back hurts everytime I noticed that its long already but its only the two pages for chapter one..maybe beacause scripts are different than comic forms. (BTW, this one is written in script form in one of my ever beloved notebooks)
Notes:
*: Reminal island is where they are staying. Roll and Data spent their 3 months there building a shuttle for Rock.
*²: Ummm...something is bothering me when it comes to the word lie,lay,laid or something else...I'm confused...please correct me if I'm wrong. I'm darn baaad in english

Dunno when will I put the intro but I already finished chapter one...and its also in script form. And I also don't know when will I update this one again...I'm a busy girl you know

[Four]

Lay (Present)/Laid (Past) = An object, or something inanimate . *The doll was innocently laid on the floor, or something...*

Lie (Present)/Lied (Past) = Power to the people! *I lie on the floor, unable to move as I am morbidly obese...*

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At least, that's what I remember ^,^. In any case, this thing's getting interesting . Same eye burning problems, yes, but tolerable still...

[Dashe]

Really, you can read those hefty paragraphs? I'm not condoning scripts here, just a bit of breakup in the large text mass. It's just way too hard to get through with my semi-ridiculous penchant for correcting people's grammar. Think I'll stick with the comic version.

[KaitouAilren]

stick with the comics...? man...you can't even understand 'em! *is looking for a scanner to make RMD: BITF remix*

[Dashe]

I can understand the comics when you ink them...my mad grammatical skills, with an s and not a z, compensate for my inability to read most things that aren't near-impeccably written without getting headaches. That, and it makes for a cheap laugh when I make misteaks* in my typing.

*Intentional error for everyone to laugh at