bola
Miitan
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Post by bola on Aug 23, 2006 13:48:15 GMT -5
If you remember, I had been cooking up ideas for Legends Fanfiction. Now, over 4 months since I had thought of that Legends/Starfox Crossover, I finally have it posted. www.fanfiction.net/s/3116713/1/ Here it is, the crossover. Feel free to give it a read and let me know what you think of it. |
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Heat Sonata
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Post by Heat Sonata on Aug 23, 2006 22:48:58 GMT -5
Hey, I read the first chapter. Pretty nice, you seem to have your ideas in order. I find it a little hard to believe Glyde's situation... "leave me for dead" is a little bit more serious than what actually happened, unless Glyde's overexagerating from madness.
Well, anyway, you've pretty comfortably simplified many questions that give Megaman Legends fans headaches, which works for the fanfic. I really did enjoy some of the humor. Keep it up.
By the way, "around" is flubbed really horrible near the opening paragraph. That's the only spelling or grammar that stood out particularly.
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bola
Miitan
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Post by bola on Sept 24, 2006 10:02:47 GMT -5
Ah, thanks for catching the spelling error, IS. And yes, Glyde is doing the overexagerating.
I fixed it up and have the second chapter up if anyone's interested in reading it.
(I know it's been over a month since I posted about this, but that was because my internet server kept flubbing up every now and again, and I couldn't get on.)
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Heat Sonata
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Post by Heat Sonata on Sept 25, 2006 11:41:22 GMT -5
I thought you'd mispelled it again, but I realize now that "aground" is actually what you meant. So that works.
My only major quip with this one is, and this is only personal preference you see, Bon Bonne being able to talk. I just feel like if the Bonnes can already understand him there's no need for him to be able to be understood by other people if he isn't already. But that's a small thing, don't worry about it.
All around, nice job. I like the improvements to Trigger's system you made, and the idea of the new Draches is neat too.
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bola
Miitan
I am here, and then I am gone!
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Post by bola on Nov 16, 2006 20:39:28 GMT -5
Wow, has it already been two months since I had a chance to post in this section? Man, time flies...
Well, for anyone who's interested, third chapter's up.
By the way, the bit with Bon being able to speak in Juno's voice is being used for a small, humorous plot piece I'm currently thinking on.
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