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Post by Captain Amadeus (Legendary Em) on Jun 17, 2009 9:45:49 GMT -5
First off, stop groaning at the prospect of ANOTHER Legends 3 fanfiction that never goes anywhere and falls off of the face of the net. This story isn't like that. This is a pros format take on the idea of how I'd continue the Legends series, and it will be completed in due time. Without further ado, I present to you Legends 3: Endgame! www.fanfiction.net/s/5092069/1/Legends_3_Endgame Nine chapters are currently posted, with with each subsequent chapter added on Friday. Please leave reviews on the fanfiction.net page, but also feel free to leave any comments directed towards me on this message board topic. I hope you enjoy the fanfiction more than the other, sometimes lesser, Megaman Legends 3 fanfiction attempts you have certainly encountered (I am not speaking of the ones on this board, as I have not read them yet). I look forward to your comments and critiques. And be aware, some language and violence is to be expected when reading this story. Rated T for Teen, people, which is why I can't post it directly on the board.
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Post by snowman on Jun 17, 2009 19:58:59 GMT -5
First, let me say this: great job! I just finished reading the prologue. It's thoroughly detailed, and that makes it more believable. I also like how the action happens right away, and leaving readers confused at the end, wanting more. It IS dark for the Megaman Legends series, I always found that series more lighthearted than many others. I prefer bright, cheery worlds to gloomy ones... But your message that it would get better has reassured me quite a bit. And *SPOILERS*how Glyde wasn't behind all of it and Megaman ended up being Roll-totally unexpected. I just hope there's no stereotypical fan character replacing Glyde... But it's so good so far, that probably won't happen. When the people were dying, it reminded me of one of my battles against Bon Bonne in MML; he destroyed a fountain and a lamppost, and I had mourned over them, saying that they were so innocent, and vowing to avenge them. I can't say what you could improve on right now, as I have only read the first bit, and it's close to my bedtime. I do know that many people could learn from your writing skills. If the story's still as good in later chapters as it is now, I may look up to you for advice on writing. ;D And if you want to see some people's previous fanfictions, take a look at the fan section on the main site, if you haven't already. EDIT: Read the next chapters, and they're very good! All the jokes fit perfectly with the Legends atmosphere, and almost all the characters act just the way they do in the game. I even imagined one scene with all the characters in MML-style 3D, complete with poorly-designed hands. I especially like how well Glyde's personality was captured. It seems like it could definitely happen in the Legends universe. Your fan character was totally unexpected, and he IS stereotypical, but not the way I meant in the second paragraph. For that, I meant like the recolored Sonic sprites named stuff like"Shade" or "Xtreme" that wield swords and aren't nice, but not evil, either. Your character isn't anything like that. He's lovable, unique for the Legends series, and I think he'll make a great addition to the story, and Glyde's crew. Oh, and him calling Glyde "Lass", that was hilarious! My only complaints are Roll's darker and gloomier personality, and how "Long live America!" is said at the end of each chapter. I just found it exclusive to other cultures. But I'm overreacting, it's really not bad at all. I'm just a baby. And Roll's changed personality is understandable, after all she's been through. I'm just glad the Bonnes are still so awesome, even under pressure! GO, BONNES, GO! I hope Roll finds "Her Megaman" soon, so she can be her normal, cheery self again! And if the intense action of the first chapter was combined with the Legendary atmosphere of the later chapters, that would be Really cool. It just seems to be almost completely based on dialogue, memories and thoughts right now. It's great to have it like that sometimes, but I'm really looking forward to some exciting, heart-pumping moments! Keep writing, you're on a roll!
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Post by Captain Amadeus (Legendary Em) on Jun 18, 2009 9:07:12 GMT -5
Whew, now that's what I call a review! I'll try and take your advice now and have Roll act less... emo in future chapters. But like you admitted, it's not like she doesn't have a reason to be upset. But anyway, this is just one of the small creative liberties I took with the characters, along with Tron's swearing. Glad you like Amadaues! As I mentioned in my Authors note for that chapter, I worked really hard on trying to create a character that would fit in the cast. I added alot of humor to his character, including his occasional missuse of pirate slang. Oh, and thank you for saying I did Glyde well; he was the character I was most worried about portraying wrong. And I love your comment about recolored Sonic sprites swinging swords and not really being evil; my last serious fanfiction before this was EXACTLY that idea. Which is why I wisely gave up on Sonic fanfiction; there's nothing that hasn't been done before. As for 'Long live America!', don't feel excluded. My most popular story ever was called 'Hit In the USA', and based on the hit Nicktoon 'Kappa Mikey'. In my story, the entire cast of the 'LilyMu' anime are inviteted to take part in various conventions in America, and end up having the worst week of their lives. Terrorist attacks, obsessive Anime fans, housing market crash, ect. I ended up doing so much America bashing that I needed to make sure my readers didn't think I was some self-loathing American. And people seemed to like my phrase, so I've kept it as my tagline. Here's a link to that story, but be aware it's a far cry different than this one: www.fanfiction.net/s/4573269/1/Hit_In_the_USA Whew, I'm not done writing my response yet! As for action, expect a small dose of Reaverbot action tomorrow when I upload chapter 5, and some more in chapter 6 next week. I'm still wondering where to go with 7; I'd originally planned a big battle scene, but then I regressed and thought of something else. Now you say you want more fighting, and I'm questioning my resolve again. I suppose I won't know until I sit down to write it; that method has worked out pretty well so far. Alright, now I'm done talking. Thanks again for taking the time to read my story. And sure, if you ever need help with writing I'd be glad to look over your work and give you pointers. However, realize that I don't think I'm great shakes myself, considering the overwelming majority of my work has been horrid or done completely for laughes. Wait... didn't I say I was done talking? ;D
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Post by ravenf6 on Jun 18, 2009 9:21:22 GMT -5
Impressive for a first chapter. I like the idea for the situation, poor Paprika...
This one did a good job of establishing Megaman and Glyde (though we know them already). I'd like to say more, but I've got to go- if I can, I'll say more after the next few chapters.
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Post by Captain Amadeus (Legendary Em) on Jun 18, 2009 10:34:10 GMT -5
Impressive for a first chapter. I like the idea for the situation, poor Paprika... This one did a good job of establishing Megaman and Glyde (though we know them already). I'd like to say more, but I've got to go- if I can, I'll say more after the next few chapters. Hey, thanks for giving the first chapter a read. Hopefully you'll enjoy the rest as well.
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Post by snowman on Jun 18, 2009 10:42:24 GMT -5
You don't have to change too much, legendaryemerald. A few changes could be nice, but it's great as it is. And I was kinda hoping you'd read my Klonoa fanfic... You don't have to, though.
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Post by Captain Amadeus (Legendary Em) on Jun 19, 2009 9:19:31 GMT -5
The next chapter of 'Legends 3: Endgame' has been posted. We head back to Roll and Tron this time for some spelunking adventures in the apply named Chapter 5, 'Digout'!
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Post by Captain Amadeus (Legendary Em) on Jun 26, 2009 8:15:24 GMT -5
"Rule #6: Do NOT double-post!
The only exceptions to the rule concern the Fan Works boards, where it might be necessary to double-post to show that you've made something new..."
Yay for loop-holes! Anyways, Chapter 6 has just been uploaded online. Check it out, everyone!
EDIT: Whew, I finally got through writting the first half of chapter 7. I'd been wracking my brain trying to think of a way of carrying out a certain conversation without delving too deep into exposition. I think in the end I accomplished what I needed to do pretty well.
Now I've just got to write in that big action sequence snowman's been asking for. Shouldn't be too hard, but I'll take a break for the rest of the day anyways.
2nd EDIT: Finished writting chapter 7 on saturday. Will be uploaded on this Friday. Now to write chapter 8, and conclude this battle sequence...
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Post by Captain Amadeus (Legendary Em) on Jul 6, 2009 9:14:13 GMT -5
T-t-triple post!
Sorry for the three day delay, but Chapter 7 has been uploaded to fanfiction.net as of now. My computer had to be rebooted from scratch, and the chapter was one of the few things to survive. Don't expect Chapter 8 on time either, as I haven't even had the chance to start on it yet.
Also, is it too much to ask that a couple more people reply in this topic? I'm tired of seeing my badly drawn Megaman face all over this topic.
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Post by Deleted on Jul 6, 2009 11:37:03 GMT -5
Hello there.
I've all the uploaded chapters so far, and I must admit that I enjoyed the story. I love everyone's interactions, the originality of the story and your fan-character is great as well ^_^
The interaction between Glyde and your fan-character are hilarious as well. I especially love how he kept calling Glyde "lass".
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Post by Captain Amadeus (Legendary Em) on Jul 7, 2009 8:56:56 GMT -5
Hey, thank you for reading my fic! I'm glad you like the interactions between the characters; if nothing else, I like to think that I can write good conversations. I have more trouble with action, which probably became apparent in the last chapter. I've got to push through all these fisticuffs so I can get into the meat of the plot, already!
And yes, everyone seems to love Captain Amadeus. "Swarthy!"
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Post by Deleted on Jul 7, 2009 9:17:17 GMT -5
You're welcome ^_^
One thing I also like about Captain Amadeus would be the fact that he's different compared to many Mega Man Legends fan-characters that are lurking out there. It's also cool that he's working with one of the canon characters, instead of doing his own thing, y'know?
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Post by Captain Amadeus (Legendary Em) on Jul 7, 2009 9:34:00 GMT -5
Ya know, there really aren't that many fan characters in Legends fanfiction. People seem to love giving Glyde siblings, however. In traingham's "Love Heist" fanfiction he gives the "young lass" a sister, though she doesn't do much. Then in another fic I read, it's implied that another character named George is Glyde's brother.
I liked how Legends 2 had the bad guys working together, so I decided to continue the trend with Amadeus. Bola and Klaymoor will be appearing soon enough as well, but not in the way you'd expect. Dang, I really need to get back to writing before I forget everything I've planned...
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Post by Deleted on Jul 7, 2009 11:30:16 GMT -5
That's true. I've seen quite a few people that did so. Although, I had never heard about this 'George' character.
I had read a few fan-fics where their fan-character steal the entire spotlight and the canon characters get no spotlight whatsoever.
I've noticed that, as the characters interact quite well in your fics ^_^.
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Post by Dragge on Jul 7, 2009 21:42:41 GMT -5
I like the story so far and noticed the twist on it when you noted that it was Legends 3 and not MML3. The action isn't too bad but that's just me. I think I'm a huge action junkie. Anyway can't wait until chap. 8 and Bola and Klaymoor to reappear. I've been thinking about making my own account on there too. I've been writing fan-fics on here but they've been getting little reviews. Keep it up!
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