Attempting to voice act for X4

[Trege]

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This was my attempt to voice act in X4, I wanted to get feedback on it, go easy on me I'm a novice voice actor, and I did mess up in this clip a bit on some parts.

(Old Link)

(Tell me what you think, I only did Zero's part and the rest is cut out so the only sound you hear is Zero, I actually laughed at myself from one part in this clip.)

[Pitch]

It's okay.. could be better. I don't think your voice fits the actions; you kind of sound like you're just reading off the script.

[Trege]

(Old check the next one)
Well I was voice acting it while watching the clip so, that could be why.

This is me without copying anything, my friend edited the voice a bit but the acting is there.
www.sendspace.com/file/niv2si

(Plus when I did the Zero one my voice is still recovering from a cold.)

[Dashe]

*Le sigh* At least someone here has the sort of initiative to do something like this. I've got to make an audio or...something. Have a trophy, Trege. You've got more initiative than I've had in the past two years. XD

[Trege]

I started acting again, and this is me attempting to act out the death of Iris.
Two clips

www.sendspace.com/file/35wseq (Since I was the only one acting at my house, I had to cut out the parts for Iris.)

The first one got cut off during the recording so it's missing like 2 seconds of the last part, but clip 2 is fine (I think I still have a long way to go before it sounds good.)