Aiyumi
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Post by Aiyumi on Aug 23, 2014 19:14:17 GMT -5
I'm writing a Legends 2 fanfic (in English) called "Trigger of Change". Summary: all Sera and Geetz want is to erase the carbons. During their stay in the Sulphur-Bottom, they are frequently visited by the boy which reminds them of that annoying Purifier Unit... Sometimes, a few small changes are all that is needed to trigger the bigger ones. Will they accomplish their mission, or will their views be changed? www.fanfiction.net/s/10564022/1/Trigger-of-ChangeAnd this is for people who like Japanese audio: I began adapting a few scenes from the fanfic into audio drama format, but in Japanese. Only the first part of chapter 1 for now, more to come. You can check it out here: aiyumi.warpstar.net/en/rockman/toc/dramaNo plans for English versions, but I could see about subtitling it if I could get it onto Youtube and if there's demand. Speaking of which, like I wrote on that page, I also wanted to upload it to Youtube, but I'd need an image for turning it into a video. The problem is that I'm visually impaired and can't create images. So if anyone knows of a nice fanart that I could put there, I'd be very grateful. Requests of new scenes for me to make are also welcome (the coffee scene is a strong candidate ). That's it for now. Chapter 2 (of the written part) is coming soon.
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Post by Dashe on Aug 25, 2014 15:36:35 GMT -5
Awesome, some new fanfiction! Your English is actually better than a lot of what's in MMLS's main site's fanfiction archives, and I'm operating under the assumption that everyone who submitted to that is a native English speaker. I also like Rock better than Mega Man as far as naming Volnutt goes. Couple of pointers for future reference: the expression is "piqued his interest" instead of "picked his interest" and the Servbots generally call guys "Master" instead of "Mister." Master's supposedly used for younger boys...and Teisel, for whatever reason, so in Legends 2 they would probably be calling Volnutt "Master Rock." Did you alter the spelling of Volnutt's name intentionally? HF did that for his comic, so I can never be too sure about what's intentional and what isn't when it comes to names. I'm liking that your characterization of Trigger is noticeably different from what Traingham wrote in Love Heist. If it turns out that the only reason the Master went to Terra and died was because he couldn't get a good cup of coffee on Elysium, that would be the most fantastic plot twist ever. How long do you plan on making this fic? It's good to have a plan and an update schedule, and it's even better to keep extra buffer chapters lined up so you can give the appearance of updating regularly even when you have writer's block. I've never tried making audiobook versions of my writing, and I've never seen anyone in the fandom do it for theirs, but it might be really useful for people who read at a rate that's slower than most people speak, assuming they're fluent in Japanese.
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Aiyumi
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Post by Aiyumi on Aug 25, 2014 20:59:32 GMT -5
Awesome, some new fanfiction! Your English is actually better than a lot of what's in MMLS's main site's fanfiction archives, and I'm operating under the assumption that everyone who submitted to that is a native English speaker. Oh, thank you . Couple of pointers for future reference: the expression is "piqued his interest" instead of "picked his interest" Fixed! Thanks! and the Servbots generally call guys "Master" instead of "Mister." Master's supposedly used for younger boys...and Teisel, for whatever reason, so in Legends 2 they would probably be calling Volnutt "Master Rock." I did that based on the Japanese version. They use "Sama" ("Master") for all the Bonnes and "San" ("Mister") for Rock. I recently watched a playthrough. When I heard them saying "Rock San" I couldn't resist. Did you alter the spelling of Volnutt's name intentionally? HF did that for his comic, so I can never be too sure about what's intentional and what isn't when it comes to names. Oops, it wasn't. Fixed now. What's with the Legends people giving names ending in two "t"s? Volnutt, Caskett, Barrett... I'm liking that your characterization of Trigger is noticeably different from what Traingham wrote in Love Heist. Traingham's Love Heist is awesome. I read it about three times already. I'm slowly leaving reviews there. If it turns out that the only reason the Master went to Terra and died was because he couldn't get a good cup of coffee on Elysium, that would be the most fantastic plot twist ever. Hahahaha! How long do you plan on making this fic? It's good to have a plan and an update schedule, and it's even better to keep extra buffer chapters lined up so you can give the appearance of updating regularly even when you have writer's block. That's what I do. I like to be one or two chapters ahead. That gives me time to check for consistency, and to make sure I don't leave (many) plot holes in the next chapter to be published. I try to update once a month. I think this fic will be around 10 chapters, but we'll see... I've never tried making audiobook versions of my writing, and I've never seen anyone in the fandom do it for theirs, but it might be really useful for people who read at a rate that's slower than most people speak, assuming they're fluent in Japanese. I don't know if mine can be considered an audiobook, also because it's just a few scenes and not the whole chapter. Think those audio dramas from the Rockman Zero and ZX soundtracks.
Thank you very much for reading, and for the pointers!
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Post by Dashe on Aug 26, 2014 13:24:31 GMT -5
Okay, awesome. Didn't know that about the Japanese version. Monthly sounds like a decent enough update rate for fanfiction. Press Start to Continue updates weekly, but it has nearly four times as many chapters. Race you to the finish?
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Aiyumi
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Post by Aiyumi on Aug 26, 2014 20:54:51 GMT -5
Monthly sounds like a decent enough update rate for fanfiction. I've seen very good fics with long chapters (over 10000 words) that update weekly . Or the person has a lot of extra chapters ready, or is very good at planning and writing... Probably all of that. Press Start to Continue updates weekly, but it has nearly four times as many chapters. Race you to the finish? Um... No, thanks.
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Post by Aiyumi on Aug 29, 2014 17:16:20 GMT -5
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Post by Dashe on Aug 31, 2014 18:12:08 GMT -5
...Instant coffee? Sera got that worked up over Terran instant coffee? Damn, that Elyisan stuff must be nastier than you let on. This is one of the first fics where I find myself really liking Sera. It was because of the Master's orchestra CD. People who talk through shows annoy me so I could really sympathize with Sera there. The thought of Sera in a frilly pink dress was hilarious. It is the second thing that someone posted to this site that reminded me of that scene from Beauty and the Beast where Cogsworth and Lumiere put ribbons in the Beast's hair and he says the looks stupid. This is definitely the funniest fic I've seen Sera and Geetz featured in. There aren't a lot of people out there who'd think to put the System in a humorous light, so major props for that. I think you listed all of the public domain music in the games, but if there's anything missing, HalcyonDays probably knows what the others are. He reads A Different Time, so if he's on Fanfiction.net looking at Legends fanfiction, then there's a chance he'd know you're looking for that information. Since the chapter looks like it's almost 10,000 words by itself, the list of grammar errors and typos I found was long, too, so I stuck it in a PM. I didn't want English notes stretching out the page. Most people read these fic responses for stuff like what people thought of the story.
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Post by Aiyumi on Sept 1, 2014 7:33:00 GMT -5
This is one of the first fics where I find myself really liking Sera. It was because of the Master's orchestra CD. People who talk through shows annoy me so I could really sympathize with Sera there. Yes, it's annoying. And they're usually very loud... The thought of Sera in a frilly pink dress was hilarious. It is the second thing that someone posted to this site that reminded me of that scene from Beauty and the Beast where Cogsworth and Lumiere put ribbons in the Beast's hair and he says the looks stupid. Hahahaha! This is definitely the funniest fic I've seen Sera and Geetz featured in. There aren't a lot of people out there who'd think to put the System in a humorous light, so major props for that. I was inspired to write this fic after watching a DASH 2 playthrough, then reading Traingham's "Love Heist" (which is awesome), Quick Cheetah's "Illogical" (the only other Sera and Geetz fic I've found), RandyPandy's "The Three Keys" and "Rock Volnutt" (two cute little oneshots). All of that left me craving for more. I was surprised to find out how small the DASH/Legends fanfic scene is, and got frustrated with the lack of more Elysium fics. I think you listed all of the public domain music in the games, but if there's anything missing, HalcyonDays probably knows what the others are. He reads A Different Time, so if he's on Fanfiction.net looking at Legends fanfiction, then there's a chance he'd know you're looking for that information. I read "A Different Place" I don't remember how many years ago. I should read it again. Since the chapter looks like it's almost 10,000 words by itself, the list of grammar errors and typos I found was long, too, so I stuck it in a PM. I'm glad that you're enjoying the fic! Thanks again for pointing out the errors. They were fixed, hopefully. I'm also curious to know people's thoughts on the other characters, specially Geetz and Trigger.
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Post by Aiyumi on Oct 4, 2014 21:44:20 GMT -5
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Post by Dashe on Oct 5, 2014 17:29:02 GMT -5
You came back! You didn't just run off and sell that MMLS-issue pool-cleaning toothbrush we gave you on the internet! This is the best Trigger reset scene I can recall reading in at least ten years of reading Mega Man Legends fanfiction. There's a chance I might've read a better one somewhere along the line, but if I did I don't remember doing it. The ones I remember all kind of just gloss over it like it's prologue material, and I like the more extensive use of Data's POV. You get bonus points for explaining the reason why Mega Man is the only one who can understand Data too. The font on fanfiction.net is...unfortunate. At the magnification level I'm using, the letters "cl" look like "d," so that gentle click near the end nearly made me squirt Surge out of my nose. It appears to be the only magnification level where that happens, thank god. I hope it's not the default for the site. If Legends 2 had actually left notes from Yuna in the ruins and made cutscenes of it, I think that'd have helped tie the story together. Just having "Get the next key and advance the plot" as your sole motivation for going into these ruins was a pretty weak motive in the game. Legends 2 in general needed more Yuna. She seemed so interesting at the start and then we barely get to see her do anything. So yeah, I hope Yuna keeps trying to prod Trigger later on. Expect some grammar notes in your inbox once I get a chance to read it through again. There aren't as many mistakes this time...I think. Maybe it'll look the same side-by-side, though.
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Post by Aiyumi on Oct 6, 2014 18:39:25 GMT -5
You came back! You didn't just run off and sell that MMLS-issue pool-cleaning toothbrush we gave you on the internet! Hahaha! Of course not! I'm taking good care of it . I've been a bit busy (and a bit silent), but I'm still around. This is the best Trigger reset scene I can recall reading in at least ten years of reading Mega Man Legends fanfiction. There's a chance I might've read a better one somewhere along the line, but if I did I don't remember doing it. The ones I remember all kind of just gloss over it like it's prologue material, and I like the more extensive use of Data's POV. You get bonus points for explaining the reason why Mega Man is the only one who can understand Data too. Wow. Thank you . And more bonus points? In general, I think that Data is a character that needs more love. Legends 2 in general needed more Yuna. She seemed so interesting at the start and then we barely get to see her do anything. So yeah, I hope Yuna keeps trying to prod Trigger later on. Like I said in my end notes, Yuna is so fun to write. So yes, she will. Expect some grammar notes in your inbox once I get a chance to read it through again. Argh... Those errors! I always read the text so many times and they still manage to slip in... There aren't as many mistakes this time...I think. Well, maybe that's a good sign, at least. I'll be waiting. Thanks in advance!
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Post by Dashe on Oct 8, 2014 14:50:21 GMT -5
Bonus points aren't that special. It's the brownie points you'll really want to count. So far Buster's the only one here who's earned enough brownie points to redeem them for brownies and he's been here since 2004.
The thing about errors is that when you type your own stuff and it's really long and you're the only one who checks it over, you will always miss things. With 9000-word chapters, it's pretty much guaranteed. I'm still tweaking PSTC 1 just because there are spots where I'm adding the word "that" or subtracting the word "that" or swapping "in" for "inside" because I think it helps give it better flow...and those chapters are only about 2000-3000 words! Writing chapters that are 3-5 times longer would logically give you about 3-5 times more errors slipping through the cracks.
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Aiyumi
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Post by Aiyumi on Oct 29, 2014 20:40:58 GMT -5
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Post by Aiyumi on Nov 7, 2014 20:35:44 GMT -5
Another update. This time, it is chapter 4. www.fanfiction.net/s/10564022/4/Not as long nor as intense as the previous one, but hey, at least we have cookies. And Elysian soup too, if you are on a diet.
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Post by Dashe on Nov 13, 2014 17:14:58 GMT -5
Sometimes it's necessary to have a chapter that's mostly setup. I'll bet you 100 zenny that their day trip destination turns out to be Kattelox. Probably the dumbest bet I've ever made in my life, really. Betting the author of a fic on the outcome of the fic. Either I have a gambling problem or I'm having withdrawal symptoms from not having a Tuttle's Legendary Travels event to recklessly bet on.
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