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Post by Raijin on Sept 12, 2010 21:20:11 GMT -5
Yeah, I think the main problem is the shoulders looking too broad. I figured it could have been the structure of the jacket creating the illusion. Some slightly wider hips could help too, especially since she appears to be a bit older.
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Post by HF on Sept 12, 2010 21:26:36 GMT -5
Older? I suppose.
I'm still fine with this!
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Post by Dashe on Sept 12, 2010 21:28:10 GMT -5
Nice to see you drawing again! As far as critique goes, her right shoulder's bugging me more than her left is, and her right leg seems to be twisted at an unusually large angle. Watch the joint attachments there. The hat looks more like a army cap now than the typical newsboy look. Army caps have been in this year, good form there. I also really like the redesign on the jacket's button configuration a lot. And the shoe detail is absolutely stellar. I actually think the best part about that drawing is her shoes, which I would buy in a heartbeat if they sold them in stores.
Hm, Roll might actually benefit from a good pair of red cargo pants considering her line of work...
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Post by HF on Sept 12, 2010 21:34:51 GMT -5
Nice to see you drawing again! As far as critique goes, her right shoulder's bugging me more than her left is, and her right leg seems to be twisted at an unusually large angle. Watch the joint attachment there. The hat looks more like a army cap now than the typical newsboy look. Army caps have been in this year, good form there. I also really like the redesign on the jacket's button configuration a lot. And the shoe detail is absolutely stellar. I actually think the best part about that drawing is her shoes, which I would buy in a heartbeat if they sold them in stores. Hm, Roll might actually benefit from a good pair of red cargo pants considering her line of work... Dashe! It is good to hear from you again, and thank you for your feedback. Interesting thought with giving her pants. As much as I like cargo pants myself (plus they are easier to draw for me), I tried not to derive too far from her original design (yet, though I can imagine myself doing so after 2-3 more iterations). Plus, those legs...
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Post by HF on Sept 19, 2010 18:45:03 GMT -5
Something like this happens when I don't sleep enough.
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Post by Pitch on Sept 19, 2010 19:13:48 GMT -5
That's pretty cool. It makes me think of some kind of cross between classic MegaMan's armor, Volnutt's armor and something out of Neon Genesis Evangelion. (it looks kind of like a plug-suit)
Regarding Roll on the previous page, I thought it was pretty cool, but the folds in the clothing seemed a bit too pronounced. Also there are spots on the sleeves that seem oddly more saturated than the rest of her jacket/shorts/hat/etc. It really draws my focus. Other than it's awesome, like everything else. (I also really love her shoes)
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Post by adam1589 on Sept 19, 2010 19:26:18 GMT -5
Nice Art, man!
Oh yeah, I just now re-read your sig Green, it's kinda funny!
Back on Subject: I don't really see plug-suit-ish-ness to it but then again, any space suit in any Mecha Anime to me is a plug-suit.
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Post by Blues on Sept 19, 2010 19:37:58 GMT -5
Very cool looking! I see a bit of MM ZX Advent in it, actually. That, or something akin to the 'intense' style of 1970's manga. :31:
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Post by HF on Sept 22, 2010 20:13:13 GMT -5
@ Green & Sharukurusu: I thought the subtitle in the image would be a giveaway. I based the concept of 'bulky organic armor' on the Guyver series. @ Blues: Haha, yeah. 70s comics where things blow up real good. Keeping earlier errors in mind, along with a couple of extra additions of my own, here is Version 2!
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Post by Pitch on Sept 22, 2010 20:36:11 GMT -5
I based the concept of 'bulky organic armor' on the Guyver series. Ack! That was so my second guess. I'm not even kidding. EDIT: I didn't notice the subtitle at all, though. x.x The new Roll picture looks awesome. I can't really think of anything else to say. Great work. o.o
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Post by Raijin on Sept 22, 2010 22:20:38 GMT -5
Yeah, very nice work. The outfit looks heavy like you wanted, without taking away any femininity. The tall collar and the scarf are a nice added touches too.
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Post by 3ld3rs on Sept 22, 2010 23:27:40 GMT -5
@ hecheff
whoa, rock looks like he's been doing his p90x and slamming protein shakes.
liking the armor.
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Post by HF on Sept 24, 2010 20:21:34 GMT -5
Thanks for the feedback again.
@ Raijin: Glad to know. And if when you see the badge patch on her left arm...
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Post by HF on Oct 19, 2010 6:54:54 GMT -5
Going with a new style during my 'absence'! Still alive and drawing DASH/Legends here, though refining and coloring this will take a while, stay tuned!
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Post by MegaTuga on Oct 19, 2010 14:32:47 GMT -5
Those eyes scare me... seriously XD
Anyways I like this one.. probably the feet are a bit... to small to reality perhaps.. just saying I'm not the best man to make art comments. I do love the chest and arms mainly for the lines over there (which look like circuits), maybe tehre sould also be some of those in the legs as well... just saying.
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