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Post by Loken on Apr 8, 2012 23:27:19 GMT -5
Pretty good! What's in her hand? Your story was pretty grea I only wish I had a copy of MoTB though because Denise and the island and stuff was all new to me.
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Digouter
Arukoitan
Who ate my crackerrrs...
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Post by Digouter on May 18, 2017 8:44:35 GMT -5
Ahahah, these are all super cute x). Particularly Lord Slick! Ehehe, they kinda remind me of characters from Dr. Seuss, and I like the personality these characters have. I also appreciate that you colored them!
It's too bad some of the links to your pictures are no longer working ; v ;...
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Post by Dashe on Jan 8, 2021 13:32:04 GMT -5
Congrats on getting four chapters up! I must be the only one in the universe who likes Cosmo's mustache better. It's always a nice surprise to find out people around here have spent their MMLS sabbaticals working hard at a story, and having the tapas and webtoon links in your sig makes it easier to relate to what would have otherwise just been random OCs popping up.
If you are looking for something to focus on for improvement as you continue to write, it's good to learn how to convey backstory in the drawings and in the characters' actions instead of putting it all in their dialogue. Even just using the dialogue to imply backstory rather than just stating it all outright can help. It helps keep the audience engaged and asking "What happens next?" or "Why did they do that? I should keep reading to find out." You did manage to pull this off when Alma refused to go on the bridge because she was afraid of heights, rather than just saying outright that she was afraid of heights. Even though you still used dialogue to get the point across, it made the characters look like they were interacting naturally with each other rather than reading a script for an audience. Practicing how to convey intent in characters' actions through drawings alone also will help with action scenes later, if they ever do get to a point where they're fighting things or you need to convey an adrenaline rush. Writing a comic takes so much drawing that your ability to convey an action through a picture alone is likely to improve on its own if you keep it in the back of your mind when you're planning out your pages, as long as you keep writing and moving forward with the story.
The fact that there were five symbols on the sword that absconded leads me to believe there are three other characters who are going to acquire them, right? Try not to let me influence how your plot goes too much, since slice of life romance (which seems to be the primary genre here) is not my cup of tea, but I'm hoping they all meet up and become a sentai group like the Power Rangers or something and go after the Wishfullment members on purpose.
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Post by Dashe on Jan 8, 2021 21:33:55 GMT -5
You're welcome, it was a good way to start the morning with a nice cup of coffee!
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Digouter
Arukoitan
Who ate my crackerrrs...
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Post by Digouter on Jan 12, 2021 4:57:13 GMT -5
Hey now hey now, this is an awesome surprise ; v ;. It seems like you've been hard at work! This is great eheh, though I'm sorry, I'll edit my post (or just post again like the double-posting miscreant I am) when I've read through the story . It looks like it's been a lot of fun to make haha. I'm beginning to sound like a broken record, but work's been kicking my butt a lot. The art is wonderful ; v ;
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SULucina
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Out on temporary leave. Will return when better.
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Post by SULucina on Jan 25, 2021 20:06:27 GMT -5
Aliens, eh?
I think the shape of the anntena bulbs are just stellar (stop it, it's not funny.) It's been a while since I've last seen your work a few years ago, while browsing the main site. This is quite a change. You can say that I myself had a whole race of alien-like, bio-electric humanoid creatures spiel going on from the end of middle school to my early years in college. They supposedly exist in a plane of existence different from ours where they are the dominant sentient life-forms of the world.
As much as a part of me wants to show off some examples of those creations, the other side kinda doesn't wanna show those images - they're some of the weirdest, unoriginal, and most cringey content I've ever drawn (and somewhat inappropriate at times) and would only make me embarrassed displaying. Sorryyyy...
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RockmanCosmo
Fritto
We've preserved Rockman DASH 5 Islands!
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Post by RockmanCosmo on Jul 24, 2021 19:20:12 GMT -5
Great job! The evil eye in the background is very cool and contrasts well with the heart and central character.
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