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Post by Dashe on Apr 20, 2015 22:05:08 GMT -5
I really like that you're addressing what Bon's deal is here. And I wonder how long it'll take for Sera to realize that Trigger's been with her ever since she was released from the stasis pod!
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Post by Aiyumi on Jun 27, 2015 21:06:15 GMT -5
And I wonder how long it'll take for Sera to realize that Trigger's been with her ever since she was released from the stasis pod! Sera's still in for a few surprises... Like what comes next! I said that the violin would be back, and here it is! Chapter 10 is even titled, " The Violin!" Special DLC: anyone wondering what those violins sound like in the Servbots' hands, may have an approximate idea by listening to this.
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Post by Dashe on Jun 28, 2015 11:03:41 GMT -5
If I had to pick, out of all fanfiction, the one chapter in existence that is most likely to make me want to go out and practice some kind of artsy endeavor, this would be it. If it were me writing this, I'd have left out the dream sequences with the baby Trigger and saved it for its own fic, though. You'd said you didn't know what direction you wanted to go with it but it seems pretty straightforward. You've pretty much just got the three options: Trigger says Yuna's name first, Trigger says Sera's name first, or Trigger says someone else's name entirely and nobody wins the bet. You'd just need to fill in the middle stuff. For that you can probably just get away with writing down random activities and drawing them out of a hat.
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Post by Aiyumi on Jun 28, 2015 15:02:28 GMT -5
If it were me writing this, I'd have left out the dream sequences with the baby Trigger and saved it for its own fic, though. You'd said you didn't know what direction you wanted to go with it but it seems pretty straightforward. You've pretty much just got the three options: Trigger says Yuna's name first, Trigger says Sera's name first, or Trigger says someone else's name entirely and nobody wins the bet. You'd just need to fill in the middle stuff. For that you can probably just get away with writing down random activities and drawing them out of a hat. I imagine that the name Trigger says first is not necessarily his final choice, and that they can still change his opinion after that. While thinking about making it into a separate fic, I ran into the following questions: How to end the fic? Some possibilities are: - end when Trigger grows up enough to a specific point. The most logical one is the point at which he becomes able to choose who he wants to stay with. (stop once he makes his choice)
- Continue past the point after he chooses (either by narrating what happens while he's raised by who he chose, or by skipping years). End when Trigger becomes a teenager or an adult, with the consequences of his choice determining whether Carbon Reinitialization is avoided or not.
- Make the fic open-ended and leave Trigger's choice up to the reader's discretion (equal chances of him choosing either Unit).
- None of the above (end in a totally unexpected way!).
I had the idea for this story before I'd written ToC's version. It was supposed to become a totally separate story, and some things were different. After ToC's version came about, though, everything got all mixed up and raised even more questions: - What about the setting? When would the story take place? (A) Shortly after Trigger reset, or (B) around the same time as ToC/Legends 2? (before I'd written ToC's version, my initial thought was to go with option A, but after ToC, the second possibility appeared)
- Sera and Geetz (and also Yuna, in case of option A above) would need to find somewhere to stay and try to adapt to Carbon culture (this would likely cause many funny events to occur), and they wouldn't be living in the Sulphur-Bottom. Unless the story takes place at the same time as Legends 2 (option B from above), and Bluecher somehow manages to deactivate Forbidden Island's security (without Rock's help, obviously) and decides to provide shelter to Sera and Geetz.
- In Sera's fantasies, since she had no idea that Data was supposed to be Trigger's memory backup device, he hadn't been present. So, what to do about Data? What role would he play in the story? He would have to be there, unless he were not to exist in this alternate timeline, just like in Sera's fantasies.
After the influence by ToC's version, it'd probably be safer to write it as if it were Sera's dream continuing, with all the inconsistencies (the Sulphur-Bottom, Roll's presence, and the Servbots learning to play the violin), but then I'd have to explain why it's like that, so the people who didn't read ToC don't get lost. And there's still the issue about the ending.
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Post by Aiyumi on May 30, 2016 9:40:39 GMT -5
It's taken a while because I'm still on a break from the Legends fandom, but here's chapter 11.
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Post by Dashe on May 30, 2016 12:54:54 GMT -5
For added bonus, run the whole thing through an editor and replace every instance of smiling with farting. You won't be disappointed!
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Post by Rockman Striker on May 31, 2016 13:42:07 GMT -5
Somehow I kinda felt related to Sera, many people take for granted the ability to smile because it's a natural thing, however I've always been a really serious person so I don't usually smile, not even when someone wants to take a picture with me. I never felt my smile was nice, I think I look better when not smiling. But when I became a salesman I had to "learn" how to smile, because one major factor for the client to decide whether or not to buy your product is to feel comfortable with you. I still don't feel I have the nicest smile but I realized that people around me actually got surprised the first time they saw me smile. Now when someone wants to take a picture with me I pretend I'm trying to sell something to the person with the camera in order to produce a natural looking fake smile. Aiyumi: This last chapter actually touched some sensible emotions I rarely feel, congrats. Dashe: Same logic can also be applied to my comment with humorous results.
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Post by Aiyumi on May 31, 2016 15:42:40 GMT -5
This last chapter actually touched some sensible emotions I rarely feel, congrats. Oh, thank you! I didn't know you have been reading my fic . Somehow I kinda felt related to Sera, many people take for granted the ability to smile because it's a natural thing, however I've always been a really serious person so I don't usually smile, not even when someone wants to take a picture with me. Same here, actually. When I was little, I smiled less. Now it happens more naturally, but I still have trouble to smile in front of a camera. But when I became a salesman I had to "learn" how to smile, because one major factor for the client to decide whether or not to buy your product is to feel comfortable with you. [...] Now when someone wants to take a picture with me I pretend I'm trying to sell something to the person with the camera in order to produce a natural looking fake smile. Hahaha, nice technique .
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Post by Aiyumi on Jun 6, 2017 9:33:49 GMT -5
Not back to the Legends fandom yet (and not much inspiration for this fic), but here's chapter 12. Chapter 13 will be the moment of truth. It'll be quite hard to write it without inspiration, though, so it may still take a while...
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Post by Dashe on Jun 6, 2017 12:28:51 GMT -5
Welp, I'm rooting for you even if it turns into a bunch of violin fanfiction by the end. Violins are cool, but I think I might be the only other person who's into that. It helps to have a good idea of how you want the story to end, and then make an outline for all the things that need to happen to get there. Once everything's in place, you're pretty much just crossing things off a list. Sometimes it can be boring, but it's better than never finishing the story at all. I'm pretty sure HF's using an outline or something like that, too, and he's extremely diligent about publishing consistently.
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Post by ShadyRounds on Jun 7, 2017 7:03:20 GMT -5
Outlines are helpful, but I can genuinely see this as being more fun to author. If it takes you another year to play around the imagination of your head, go for it, I'll be glad to catch up on this while you do that.
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Post by Aiyumi on Jun 7, 2017 15:29:47 GMT -5
Welp, I'm rooting for you even if it turns into a bunch of violin fanfiction by the end. Violins are cool, but I think I might be the only other person who's into that. I was surprised to know that one reader over at FFN is a violinist. I don't care if others don't care about violins, though. As long as someone likes the story (violin or not), it's good enough to me. It helps to have a good idea of how you want the story to end, and then make an outline for all the things that need to happen to get there. Once everything's in place, you're pretty much just crossing things off a list. I already have an idea of the important events and how the story should end. The problem is expanding it all into scenes and compelling dialogue. This is especially hard when I'm not in the right mood to write the fic and not feeling the characters.
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