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Post by Dragge on Aug 28, 2007 20:37:55 GMT -5
*Note, No one post unless I say so. Otherwise enjoy my sequal to Legends 2*
Chapter 1-The Return to Terra
"Well this should be it." said a confident Roll looking at a rocket. "We'll finally get to Mega Man!"
"Liftoff in 3, 2, 1!" yelled Tron. The rocket takes off as it's destination Elysium.
On Elysium Mega Man, Yuna, and Sera back in her own body are looking at the sun rising in the distance outside the Masters's house.
"It's beautiful. I'm sort of glad that I'm still here." Mega Man said.
"It is. Nothing is better than this." explained Yuna.
Then a rumble in the distance got louder and louder until out of no where a rocket landed. The door at the top opened up and a servebot fell about 16 feet and landed on his head.
"Master Mega Man! Bon and I came to get you and the others."
"Yuna, go get Sera."
After Mega Man, Sera, Yuna, and the Servebot got on the rocket they headed back to Terra.
"So Bon, how have you been?" asked Mega Man.
"Actually quite exquisit!"
"Uhhhhh...... how can you talk?"
"Babu."
The trip took about two hours. When they got back Roll and Tron both ran to hug Mega Man and all three fell on the ground.
"I didn't know I would be missed this much."
Everyone then started to greet Mega Man for being back on Terra.
"Roll, in a few hours I'll be able to give you your mom back then go get your dad." explained Yuna.
Then a blast came out of nowhere destroying the Flutter and the Gesselschaft.
"Take that as a warning, Teisel, Mega Man." said the mystery person.
"Glyde???" Teisel said shocked.
"Yes it's me. I teamed up with Klaymoor and started a new gang of pirated along with my Birdbots. So long."
"Looks like we need a new ship." Gramps said.
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Post by Dragge on Aug 29, 2007 18:00:48 GMT -5
*after this you can post until next chapter*
Chapter 2-Rebuilding the Flutter and Roll's Parents
After the explosion everyone pitched in zenny to rebuild the Flutter. They were on an island. An island known as Kattelox.
"We're on Kattelox. I'm going to the bank to get a loan." Mega Man said.
Mega Man went to the bank and got out about 300,000. In no time the Flutter was fixed. Now the Bonnes and the Caskets live under one roof. They named it the Flutterschaft.
"Okay, we'll come back once we get Roll's parents. It's a good thing we have spare rooms." Yuna said.
First Roll got her mom back because of Yuna. Then they went to Kimotoma for Banner. After that everyone went back to Kattelox. It didn't look the same as when they left. It looked as if everything was on fire. Including the city.
"Okay, Mega Man, you and I will head out and see what's up." Banner said.
"Don't forget me and Bon!" Teisel exclaimed.
"Babu!"
"Alright, this will give you a chance to try your new buster gun." Mega Man said.
Then without a moment to spare, the four of them heading off towards the city thinking pirates were attacking. Instead, it was something worse than that, and no it's NOT Glyde
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Post by Rage on Aug 29, 2007 20:24:58 GMT -5
*scratches his head*
I'm not sure what I should say this. It's rather short and a couple of events are finished in less than two paragraphs.
Everything is short lived. Mega man gets back, Roll and Tron "attack" him with love, Glyde blows up ship, etc. Pacing is a good thing.
Maybe I'm being a little bit picky about it or I'm not used something like this. I don't know. I'll figure it out soon enough.
Remember this, Pacing is a good thing. Slow down a little bit. That's just some random advise from you local crazy.
By the way, the Gesselschaft was destroyed in the first legends. Unless you intended it to be like a Gesselschaft number two or something like that.
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Trege
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Meddling with Legends 1, Legends 2 and Mega Man 64 data.
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Post by Trege on Aug 29, 2007 21:28:06 GMT -5
I agree with =Rage= it needs a bit more depth and length Also try not to rush Fan fiction takes time if you apply that it will be a good Fan fiction.
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Post by Dragge on Aug 31, 2007 21:26:49 GMT -5
*I'm back! Stop all posts!*
Capter 3-Reaverbot Attack Pt.1/A New Friend
Mega Man, Banner, and the Bonne brother reach downtown and are shocked at the destruction. The Bonnes head over to Uptown.
"I can't believe reaverbots are attacking the Island." Mega Man says.
"It's hard to believe it I know." Banner says. Then reaverbots start coming from nowhere and start attacking. Mega Man and Banner start running through the Downtown area and destroys any reaverbots in sight. They catch up in the middle. "They're too tough!" Mega Man exclaims.
Then a teen about 14 comes out of the Apple Market and with a few shots from his own buster destroys the reaverbots. He is about 5 foot 6 inches tall, good build, tan and black armor, and a trench coat and hat to match.
"Get out of here! It's too dangerous!"
"No way! I'm going to check on the Mayor."
Mega Man runs off to City Hall. Once he gets there he doesn't notice a reaverbot and is knocked unconcious. He wakes up a few hours later in his room. He gets out of bed and goes into the living room where everyone is.
"Mega Man your alright!" Roll says as she hugs Mega Man. "How did I get back here?"
"I brought you back." the mysterious teen says.
"Who are you?"
"Name's Griff. You can call me Master of Time if you want."
"Master of Time?"
"My armor comes with the ability to control time on whatever I want."
"Thanks for rescuing me. And welcome to the team."
"No problem."
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Post by Dragge on Sept 2, 2007 21:39:30 GMT -5
Chapter 4-Reaverbot Attack Pt.2 "Hey Mega Man! I have to tell you something." Griff says. "What is it?" Then the Flutterschaft gets hit by an explosion and doesn't blow up this time. Mega Man looks out the window and sees the reaverbots attacking. "Mega Man you hold them off while I get my Camaro." "You have a Camaro Griff?" "Of course! I'm really only fourty but kept my 14 year old form!" Griff then runs off to town to get his '74 Camaro. Mega Man and Banner once again go to attack the reaverbots. When every one reaverbot is destroyed two more take its place. The two keep fighting them off for so long the start to wear out before too long. Then they hear Griff coming back with his Camaro. "Eat rubber slackers!!!" Then Griff runs over them with his car and destroys them but more appear. Griff gets out and the Camaro turns into a fighting robot mech suit. Griff gets in and activates the buster. After a few hours of shooting and dodging the reaverbots stop appearing. "What took you so long Griff?" Banner asks. "I couldn't find my key." " " "And the reaverbots kept attacking me along the way. I live in a condo in the City Hall area. I'm a digger myself." "What were you going to tell me earlier Griff?" Mega Man asks. "I know the truth behind the Mother Lode. The real truth. That's why the reaverbots are attacking. It's my fault."
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Post by Dragge on Sept 3, 2007 10:26:18 GMT -5
*You know the drill post after chapter 5* Chapter 5-The Truth About the Mother Lode "The Mother Lode isn't the program to destroy the carbons. The Mother Lode is a collection of five high powered refractors. I created the Mother Lode myself." "Griff, if you created the mother lode then why don't you have it anymore?" Banner asked. "I didn't want it. I had and still do have all the money I need. I wanted to see someone else get it. I created a challenge though. The refractors are guarded by five mega-guardian-master-reaverbots." "What about the reaverbots above the ground?" Tron asked. "The reaverbots that I created to keep the refractors safe, I made inactive until someone went inside. But the reaverbots activated on their own terms and plan on destroying Terra. "So just WHAT THE HECK do we do!?!?!?!?" Teisel exclaimed. "We go to the five ruins where they are located and destroy the reaverbots. Even if it meens destroying the Mother Lode itself." Griff explained. "So where are the ruins?" Roll asked. "One is located here on Kattelox, one on Maxstatso island, Endontato island, Calbania island, and Archibald island." "My guess is we start here." said Yuna. "Yes, and hopefully the refractor is still there. It was a rainbow colored one." Teisel- "I uh sort of sold it." "Well where is it, because where the refractor goes the reaverbot follows." "I sold it to a guy on Ostasis Island and he put it in the ruins." "Okay. The five reaverbots have elements. Air, electricity, ground, water, and fire." Griff said. "Where do we go first?" Sera asked. "We go to Ostasis, Maxstatso, Endontato, Calbania, then Archibald island." Griff said. "Okay. First let's prepare to leave tomorrow morning." Roll said.
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Post by Dashe on Sept 3, 2007 11:11:01 GMT -5
One thing I did notice about your story is that it's (mostly) set in the present tense. I actually like chapter 5 better because all the verbs are in the past tense. It makes it so much easier to compute for some reason. That, and you don't have very many descriptions or actions other than basic dialogue. Work on fleshing out the actions and descriptions of settings so it's more than just a scripted dialogue slapped into paragraphs (which is, to be brutally honest, what it looks like, as opposed to a story that was originally written in prose).
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Post by Blues on Sept 3, 2007 18:53:16 GMT -5
dragge, have you ever thought of turning this story into an RP? That would help it be better than one person with all the posts.
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Post by Dragge on Sept 3, 2007 20:04:35 GMT -5
@ Dashe: PM me and give me an example. @ Blues: That's a good idea. I might do that after one or two more chapters. Thank you both!!! ;D
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Post by Dragge on Sept 4, 2007 20:32:24 GMT -5
*No more posting*
Chapter 6-Off to Ostasis Island
So after Griff telling everyone about the Mother Lode they had all gone off to get supplies for the busters of Mega Man, Banner, and Griff.
While they were doing that, the Bonnes had gone to scavenge for parts in the local ruins.
Gramps, Sera, Yuna, Roll,and Matilda along with some Servebots fixed up the Flutterschaft.
Bluecher on the other hand had gone off to the Sulpher Bottom to get some supplies to help everyone in their quest to the new islands.
After about a few more hours they had all gathered up again to set off.
"Well Mega Man, good luck and take care!" Bluecher said.
"You mean you're not coming?"
"I can't. I'm too old for this stuff anymore. See ya!"
"Take care yourself! Roll, start up the Flutterschaft."
"That's a mouthful! How about calling it the Blue Bomber?" sugested Griff.
"Well, that sounds good to me!"Mega man said.
After that everyone loaded onto the Blue Bomber and set off for Ostasis Island. While Roll drove everyone passed the time by doing other things. Mega Man and Teisel had picked up that new game called Mega Man Legends. It looked pretty interesting. Teisel could never beat his own Marwolf and quit the game. Mega Man on the other hand beat Juno in under three hours and unlocked easy mode.
Gramps, Yuna, and Sera kept playing Scrabble again and again. Matilda and Banner went to sleep.
The Servebots kept playing monkey in the middle with Data. Tron and Bon checked over all the weapons to make sure everything was intact.
Griff ended up polishing his Camaro and went to play the Transformer movie game.
In those ten hours everyone did get bored and stopped what they were doing.
"We are finally arriving at Ostasis Island" Roll said over the intercom.
"Finally!" Mega Man said.
Those who where heading off to the ruins gathered all their parts and got outside. The group included; Mega Man, Banner, Griff, Teisel, Tron, Bon, and a few servebots. And Data. They all headed off toward the town and were surprised when they found out that Glyde was attacking the town.
"I see you've all come! We are the Golden Avengers! There's; me, Klaymoor, Bruticus, Axel, and Dragge!" Glyde explained. "Stop us if you can!" Klaymoor said.
After that, the battle for Ostasis Island had begun.
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Post by Dragge on Sept 5, 2007 19:56:16 GMT -5
Chapter 7-Glyde's Attack
Dragge. Why does that name sound familiar?
"Look alive Griff! You're just standing there doing nothing!" Mega Man yelled at his comrade.
Bruticus is a big guy. He was the muscular one in the gang. He has red armor, a big laser sword, and a big attitude as well. Bruticus was trying to destroy Griff. Griff though can think and act at the same time so he was dodging everything Bruticus was throwing at him.
The Bonnes were taking on Glyde and the Birdbots. "Because of you guys I needed to get robotic upgrades!" Glyde yelled. His hand then turns into mega huge cannon. The Bonnes evade the attack and hit back, harder.
Mega Man and Banner had decided to take on Axel. He's nothing special. He wears a black cloak and is armed with two flame swords and a hand held buster.
Mega Man and Banner kept trying to hit him but he was too quick and they kept getting hit with his buster.
The Battle lasted for quite some time. About half of the town was destroyed. Glyde and his gang left with a vengance. Unfortunately Dragge didn't know. He had a mission to do. To go in the ruins and get the first fifth of the Mother Lode.
So after the battle Mega Man and everyone else left for the ruins to try and get the refractor themselves.
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Post by Musashi on Sept 5, 2007 22:09:52 GMT -5
I'm sorry, but this looks more like a movie-script than a fan-fiction...
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Post by Dragge on Sept 6, 2007 14:41:30 GMT -5
Really? You serious? I don't think so because 1) There's no panning out or anything like that. If I think of anyhting else I'll edit.
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Post by Dragge on Sept 6, 2007 20:06:12 GMT -5
*No posting!*
Chapter 8-Dragge's Intro
Mega Man and the gang walked into the ruins to find the reaverbot.
"He's located on floor B-2." Griff said.
From out of nowhere came someone in black armor with a buster gun and claws.
"Name's Dragge. First class purifier Dragge."
"Alright Dragge we're here to stop you!" Banner said.
"I'm not here to fight. Actually I'm not with Glyde."
"Wait, you said first class purifier." Mega Man said.
"Of course. I was created on Elysium. I helped Griff create the Mother Lode."
"That's why your name sounded so familiar to me!" Griff exclaimed.
"Well let's go find the reaverbot." said Teisel.
"He's right. We have to stop them or else the reaverbots above ground will stay active." Mega Man said.
And with that they all headed off.
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